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A feature western · Arizona Territory, 1886
Burning Water

1880s Arizona. When a ruthless mining magnate burns his ranch and murders his wife, a reformed outlaw rides for revenge with his six-year-old daughter at his side — breaking his vow to leave violence behind as she watches him become the killer he swore he’d buried.
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The story
Act one
Tom Burroughs — outlaw turned rancher — has built a life with Claire and their six-year-old daughter, Alice. When Marcus Blackwood’s Empire Mining chokes the valley’s water, Tom leads the ranchers to a legal victory. Blackwood answers by burning the Burroughs ranch. Claire dies after going back into the fire to save Tom.
Act two
Tom chooses vengeance. Claire’s brothers, Wade and Jack, ride with him. Alice refuses to leave her father, forcing Tom to carry her into the violence he once swore to abandon. With each killing, she pulls farther away — until she watches him the way she would watch a stranger.
Act three
Wade and Jack die in Prescott. Wounded, Tom faces Blackwood in a pine grove with Alice watching. She begs him to walk away. He cannot. Tom kills Blackwood, is captured, and goes to the gallows. Alice finally turns away — and years later names her own son Tom.
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Theme
Central question
"Can a man truly change — or does violence always reclaim what it made?"
Emotional core
The question isn’t whether Tom can kill the men responsible. We know he can. It’s what happens when his six-year-old daughter watches him do it.
The ending
Alice begs Tom to walk away. He kills Blackwood anyway. At the gallows, she finally turns away. Later she retrieves Honey and the stone from Claire’s grave. Years later, she names her son Tom.
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Visual language
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The horned toad
The film’s opening image and governing metaphor. It survives first by going still, flattening into the dirt, trying to disappear. When cornered, it turns to a startling, costly defense. Tom has spent years living the first half of that image. The story tests what happens when he returns to the second.
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White picket fence
Part of the home Tom and Claire build. It stands perfectly intact when the ranch burns. Later, another perfect white fence surrounds Dyer’s house, where his wife and daughter live — the same image of ordinary family life on the other side of Tom’s vengeance.
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Honey
The wooden bear Tom carves for Alice becomes the physical bond between them. She carries Honey through the revenge trail, gives the bear back to Tom through the jail bars, and he takes it to the gallows. Afterward, Alice retrieves Honey from the mud and holds it with the stone from Claire’s grave.
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The characters
People worth fighting for.
People worth fearing.
An ensemble built from the ground up — each character a distinct moral weight in Tom's story.
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Tom Burroughs
Protagonist · Reformed outlaw
A train robber who put down his gun for Claire and built something real: a ranch, a family, a reputation as a man who walked away from violence. When Empire Mining destroys that life, Tom does not discover a violent side he never knew he had. He knowingly returns to the man he believed he had left behind.
His tragedy is that he remains conscious of the cost. He sees Alice stop taking his hand. He hears Wade tell him to turn around. He promises there is only one more. By the time Blackwood gives him a final choice in front of Alice, Tom knows exactly what he is losing — and chooses vengeance anyway.
“I thought I could walk away. She made me believe it.”— Tom, after Dyer
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Claire Burroughs
Tom's wife · The ranch · The reason
Claire ran her family’s ranch after her father died and her brothers rode away. Self-sufficient, clear-eyed, and unsentimental, she nurses a shot-up stranger back to health, chooses him knowing exactly who he has been, and builds a family with him. When Empire comes for the valley, Claire is the one who insists they organize, hire a lawyer, and fight together.
Claire also gives Alice the other half of the film’s moral code: walk away from trouble you did not ask for, but when trouble comes to your home, your family, your dirt — protect what’s yours. She dies after running back into the burning house to save Tom. Afterward, that lesson survives in Alice even as Tom abandons his own.
“I didn’t marry a saint, Tom. I married a man who knew when to stop running.”
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Alice Burroughs
Tom's daughter · The moral compass
Six years old. Practical, watchful, and already more perceptive than the adults around her. Tom teaches her that if you can walk away from trouble, you do. Claire teaches her that when trouble comes to your home or family, you stay and protect what’s yours. After Claire dies, Alice refuses to leave Tom — and rides into the consequences of both lessons.
Alice becomes the film’s moral register. She stops taking Tom’s hand. She steps away from his touch. After Dyer, she watches her father the way she would watch a stranger. At Blackwood’s death she begs him to stop. At the gallows she finally turns away — then returns for Honey. Her final voiceover gives the story its grace note: she names her son Tom.
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Marcus Blackwood
Antagonist · Empire Mining
Sixties. A mining magnate with polished boots and hands that tell another story: scarred knuckles, swollen joints, fingers bent by work that came before the money. He worked a Welsh coal seam before he could read. He sees the ranching valley as temporary — water for a future city, land for a future rail line. Families disappear. What he builds remains.
Privately, Blackwood keeps a worn doll and a portrait of Margaret, the daughter diphtheria took at five. He tells Dyer to “remove” the Burroughs ranch and deliberately does not ask how. When Tom comes for him, Blackwood straps on a gun belt he has not worn in more than a decade and uses the payroll as bait. In the final grove, he recognizes Tom’s grief — and forces him to choose in front of Alice.
“Whatever you choose, she watches you choose it.”
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The Martin brothers
Wade Martin
Claire’s brother · Tom’s oldest ally
Burly, steady, and the man who carried a bleeding Tom to Claire’s door after the train robbery. Seven years later, Wade rides with Tom after Claire’s death — but becomes the clearest voice telling him when revenge has gone too far. He sees Alice pulling away before Tom will admit it. In Prescott, Wade charges a gunman aiming at Tom and takes two bullets. His last unfinished words: “Take care of my nie—”
Jack Martin
Claire’s younger brother · The heart of it
Nineteen when we first meet him: wiry, quick with a grin, the youngest of the Martin siblings. He fetches the preacher when Tom and Claire marry and later rides the revenge trail with Tom and Wade. Dutch becomes the first man Jack ever kills — and Jack is shaken by feeling both something and nothing. In Prescott he is shot during the payroll ambush and dies joking about the rope swing and “a whole bunch a damn fools.”
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Empire's instruments
Dutch Wagner
Hired gun · The man who struck the match
Scarred face, cold eyes, ornate cards, solitaire. Dyer pays him to burn the Burroughs ranch while the family sleeps. Tom and Jack track him to Cedar Canyon and force Dyer’s name from him over a fire. Jack kills him — the first man Jack has ever killed. Tom pockets Dutch’s unusual deck, turning a solitary card game into the trail that leads to the next man.
Nathan Dyer
Empire’s money man · The man who hired the match
Thirties, spectacles, clean suit, meticulous ledgers. Blackwood tells him to remove the Burroughs ranch; Dyer hires Dutch. At home, Dyer is also a husband and father. A child’s drawing marked “PAPA” sits beside his ledger. Tom makes him face it, hangs him, and sets the room on fire — then returns only to end the screaming with a gunshot. Alice watches from the tree line like she is looking at a stranger.
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The Whitakers
Cole Whitaker
Pastor · Alice’s guardian
Forties, pastor’s collar, unarmed at the back of the posse that finds Tom and Blackwood. Cole steps forward for Alice and gives Tom his word before God that she will be safe. He and Sarah keep that promise. Their own daughter, Emma, died of fever three years earlier — making Cole a quiet counterweight to Tom and Blackwood: another man shaped by loss, but not toward violence.
Sarah Whitaker
Cole’s wife · Alice’s family now
Thirties, quiet strength. Sarah’s care is expressed almost entirely through action. She sits with Alice every night until she falls asleep and sews her a simple new dress with a hummingbird embroidered at the collar — the image she has stitched since losing Emma. When Tom sees Alice clean, braided, and cared for at the jail, he understands that Cole’s promise is being kept.
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Comparables
True Grit
Coen Bros., 2010
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Unforgiven
Eastwood, 1992
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The Proposition
Hillcoat, 2005
— Comparisons drawn by Script Reader Pro analyst Michael Kalesniko —
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ISA Emerging Screenwriters — Action/Adventure Winner
Burning Water won the ISA Emerging Screenwriters Action/Adventure competition.
Script Reader Pro — Recommend
Analyst Michael Kalesniko: one of ~6 Recommends in ~600 scripts reviewed. Comps: True Grit, Unforgiven.
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13 Steps — #1 Western Short
Burning Water originated from 13 Steps, a short western that ranked #1 on The Red List. Held the top ranking for two years. Award winner in 20+ festivals. Burning Water is the feature expansion of that proven world.
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Authentic voice
Retired Fire Chief · Search-and-rescue pilot · Set Medic/EMT · Dolphin language researcher · College instructor. Writes from life.
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Ready to read
Burning Water

118 pages · Elevated western revenge thriller · Feature screenplay
Loren Davis
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